This was a decent heist-on-the-moon story, but I didn’t love most of the characters, unfortunately. I appreciate the effort to make the protagonist more diverse — a Muslim woman in her twenties — but she still came across to me as clearly written by a dude. She makes a lot of jokes you would expect from a junior high boy, so she didn’t seem very authentic. For example, describing drinking water while in a space suit:
I turned my head inside the helmet, bit a nipple (try not to get excited), and sucked some water out.
There were a lot of little jokes and commentaries delivered in this awkward, parenthetical way, like she’s abruptly addressing the reader directly. That took me out of the story at times.